Wednesday, April 7, 2010

My Story Under Sea


My story
was conceived in water
born on rising tide
told
by a fisherman and his boat

My story contains chapters
that intertwine like seaweeds, which
conceal secrets of life
within  shadows that lie on seabed

My story grows
like other creatures under sea
absorbs salted water
breathes melted sunshine
and moonlight

My story
is a mystery
a mystery that displays scenarios
with anticipations, yet
surprises, like ever-increasing ripples
perplex
fisherman
and his boat


19 comments:

  1. I like it, and would love to know more about your story

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  2. I love how it gives me a vision of the sea itself.I love the sea.

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  3. Your poem is as subtle and enigmatic as the life it portrays. A life lived beneath the water's surface that no fisherman's net can reach.

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  5. This was really good, love the flow, the imagery, I hear your passion.

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  6. I love the extended metaphor which you have used so well in this poem. It opened up a whole new perspective on the theme of your poem.

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  7. "breathes melted sunshine" --
    Love the imagery and flow of this poem. Very nice!

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  8. Thanks Kerry O'Connor & Judith C Evans!

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  9. Yun Yi,

    A very nicely written piece of poetry.
    I think there is probably another story to be told.

    Eileen

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  10. Nice work YY - this poem has a very engaging narrative. I was pulled in right away.

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  11. thanks Eillen T O'Neil!
    another story? maybe :-)

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  12. @Poets United,
    thanks! glad you were pulled in! i was drowned when i wrote it:-)

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  13. Well if you were advertising your story with this poem then it has worked! Wonderfully written the images flowed through my mind.

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  14. @Andy Mcdonald,
    thanks! i think i am advertising a story of life. as soon as i finished writing, it belongs to whoever resonate her mysterious tone.

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