Wednesday, April 7, 2010

My Story Under Sea


My story
was conceived in water
born on rising tide
told
by a fisherman and his boat

My story contains chapters
that intertwine like seaweeds, which
conceal secrets of life
within  shadows that lie on seabed

My story grows
like other creatures under sea
absorbs salted water
breathes melted sunshine
and moonlight

My story
is a mystery
a mystery that displays scenarios
with anticipations, yet
surprises, like ever-increasing ripples
perplex
fisherman
and his boat


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18 comments:

  1. Ran FuchsApril 7, 2010 at 5:32 PM

    I like it, and would love to know more about your story

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  2. Yun YiApril 7, 2010 at 6:07 PM

    thanks!

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  3. June_ButterflyApril 8, 2010 at 12:25 AM

    I love how it gives me a vision of the sea itself.I love the sea.

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  4. nothingprofoundApril 8, 2010 at 9:11 AM

    Your poem is as subtle and enigmatic as the life it portrays. A life lived beneath the water's surface that no fisherman's net can reach.

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  5. Yun YiApril 8, 2010 at 9:28 AM

    Thanks NP!

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  6. Anastasia F-BJune 3, 2010 at 3:05 AM

    It's a wonderful story. :-)

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  7. AnonymousMay 4, 2011 at 9:35 PM

    I’ve not too long ago started a weblog, the knowledge you provide on this website has helped me tremendously. Thanks for all your time & work.

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  8. ChristineMay 15, 2011 at 2:12 PM

    This was really good, love the flow, the imagery, I hear your passion.

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  9. Kerry O'ConnorMay 15, 2011 at 2:54 PM

    I love the extended metaphor which you have used so well in this poem. It opened up a whole new perspective on the theme of your poem.

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  10. Judith C EvansMay 15, 2011 at 3:56 PM

    "breathes melted sunshine" --
    Love the imagery and flow of this poem. Very nice!

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  11. Yun YiMay 15, 2011 at 6:16 PM

    thank Christine!

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  12. Yun YiMay 15, 2011 at 6:16 PM

    Thanks Kerry O'Connor & Judith C Evans!

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  13. Eileen T O'Neill .....May 16, 2011 at 1:10 PM

    Yun Yi,

    A very nicely written piece of poetry.
    I think there is probably another story to be told.

    Eileen

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  14. Poets UnitedMay 16, 2011 at 2:16 PM

    Nice work YY - this poem has a very engaging narrative. I was pulled in right away.

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  15. Yun YiMay 16, 2011 at 3:22 PM

    thanks Eillen T O'Neil!
    another story? maybe :-)

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  16. Yun YiMay 16, 2011 at 3:23 PM

    @Poets United,
    thanks! glad you were pulled in! i was drowned when i wrote it:-)

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  17. Andy McdonaldMay 16, 2011 at 6:23 PM

    Well if you were advertising your story with this poem then it has worked! Wonderfully written the images flowed through my mind.

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  18. Yun YiMay 16, 2011 at 6:42 PM

    @Andy Mcdonald,
    thanks! i think i am advertising a story of life. as soon as i finished writing, it belongs to whoever resonate her mysterious tone.

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